Pronunciate more
Without putting emphasis on different words and parts of words, it's just like talking to backround music. You need to sing soulfully, not just sing like you are reading off a sheet of paper.
Guitar was good, but not as good as you can do.
Great recording
Much better than your past recording of the song. The vocals are a lot better in tune with the song.
1. Don't sing too loud in some parts, blues is a mellow feel feel, and you usually need to change the volume in studio on the computer when you do sing louder.
2. The blues fall isn't a change in tempo, so keep the tempo.
3. Try to keep guitar parts to short bursts not interrupting vocals.
Descent
Your white noise problem is already fixed based on what i've heard with your other recordings, so what I can say that will help is to try recording voice and guitar seperate.
It gets a better sound. But if you want that delta blues style, you either have to deal with lots of whitenoise, or get really good equipment.
Pretty good
It sounds pretty good. Effects and even practice can't really amount to Jimi's soulful playing, but tributes are good. Atleast it shows people still enjoy his music.
Try making sure you change how loud you are on certain parts, exagerate certain notes; it helps get a better sound in all.
Good Loop
I think it was pretty good, but i'd recommend putting more emphesis upon the starts and finishes of bars. It gives a lot more command to the song; but for a test this was good.
Synth away
The beginning like 5 seconds is good, if you could up the volume on the melody there and take out the synth I think it would sound better.
well see, i synthed nearly everything in this song. could you be more specific? is it the fading ambient noise, or the...semi orchestral organ....or the drum beat that is the problem?
Close to the real guys
This is really close to stuff i've listened to, skill and enjoyability wise. Jethro tull is the band that comes to mind from this song, because it's backing is based on unusual scales and rare chord progressions and cut into sections, 4 to say, (and Thick as a birck part 1 for example which was around 10 songs put into a straight 20 minute track).
Things to work on. The drums are very basic. I understand you arn't a drummer, but it would be good to have some more complex rythyms though. You don't have to do too much more though. For example, you have guys like the drummer from queen whos most challenging thing in his entire career was playing a song in 5/4. Just try to get a little more drumming. I'm not saying it has to sound like "The happiest days of our lives" from Pink Floyd's the wall, but it does need some more.
Hey! Haven't seen you in a while.
Anyway, I really don't want to go all out with the drums here because my intention for this piece was to put the focus on the melodies, since this is a fugue. If I started adding complex drum rhythms to this song, that would kill it. The drum beat is kinda catchy here so that's good enough.
"My Ears are Bleeding A Little", but it's ok.
It's not exactly some easy to the ears, but it does sound very. Good use of harmonics, it made it sound a little more together in the solo. It sounds really weird, like you were just going crazy with gain, tbut that's ok, it just makes it originial. Good work on the song, it sounded great, just turn the gain down a lil next time so it doesn't give me internal bleeding please.
Lots of loops, too many
I think over time, people's music is able to go into a vast assortmant of ways. With synthesizers and recording programs, there are an infimous array of sounds to chose from. So picking only a few and making repeated loops of them isn't taking control of it. Try taking time on your music, that's what I learned, I submitted my first piece and it got owned by voters, simply because it was not well done.
I didn't vote on your submission because I would be making my submissions in this area seem better. Just try, I am not trying to be mean, just trying to give some criticizm.
Its good that at least u did a good criticizm before giving a low score. x3
Well, here is my answer to ur opinion :P
I didnt took my time with this song cuz it was intented to be made by improvising...
u may hear repeated loops cuz it was just improvised and I wanted one melody to be the main on the song [u may hear the melody like 3 times]. [Btw the loops were intented to mix with the main, and give more spice :P].
well, what I did exactly was improvise the whole song on piano and then select some other sounds and give them a melody so they can go on with the song...
The reason why I used just a few sounds its because with more sounds on, it would ruin the way I wanted the song to be.
well, all that said, I'm glad u gave ur opinion :]
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